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The Grier siblings

The Grier siblings

188K Reads 3.9K Votes 61 Part Story
Victoria By victoriaaa_rlz Completed

Hey I'm Victoria Grier. I'm 15 years old and my twin brother is hayes and my older brother is Nash. I'm also vine and YouTube famous. Will her life change forever after she goes to go magcon

Evef12 Evef12 Jul 08, 2016
And then he said and I said this happened that happened and I was like and he was like then we ran and I tackled him he came and said and I said. It's Called "quotation" marks!😋
josie_loves_food josie_loves_food Aug 18, 2016
This is do terrible, I'm gagging... And legally blonde is my favorite movie so that's saying something
thaliacaldwell thaliacaldwell Jul 10, 2016
The amount of likes in every paragraph is really excessive. Also, using 'and I was like / and he was like' is informal. You could try to expand your vocabulary past 'and' & 'like'
kiingmae kiingmae May 12, 2016
I'm reading thins like legally blonde because it's always "and I was like......"
reese04 reese04 Feb 29, 2016
I'm not trying to be rude but maybe next time I think you sould maybe try to put he says, she says ect. after the dialogue to make the paragraphs read smoother
darklimelines darklimelines Mar 01, 2016
If I were correcting this whole story and I was your teacher I would give you an 'F'. Not to be rude but- I hate how you said 'he was like, she was like' a million times.  Also that's not how you spell 'Hey' you spelled it 'heyy' but it's actually 'Hey', MIND BLOWN!