My Ex: Harry Styles (on hold)

14 Part Story 12.9K Reads 148 Votes
Iloveonedirection9 By Iloveonedirection9 Updated 2 years ago
Amelia Adams a normal 18 year old girl, with not such a normal life. She is mothering HARRY STYLES baby! Harry doesnt even know, but will everything change when Amelia is forced to a one direction concert?
you're story was one of the best i've ever read ! i just loved it <3
Okay , so I can see that you have worked on trying to decrease the number of exclamation marks in the dialogue and that's pretty good , I still think your characters are a weeeee bit too cheery :P but that birthday breakfast made me hungry :( Nice chapter !
I'm pretty defensive about One Direction too :P
                                    You didn't have a lot of description, setting and dialogue. There were too many exclamation marks. You need to edit this, is all I can say.
                                    But good job :D
It's a little short but it's okay. Like @xohannah_bananaxo said, a little description would be fantastic.
One Direction! Huwaaaaaa! *u* This is very nice! I like it how you keep it cool with the reality! Amazing chapter plus it's ONE DIRECTION! Sorry, I just can't get over that :D Haha Reading on!
Again, just a bit more detail and this will be fantastic! :)