Friends With Benefits

Friends With Benefits

52.3K Reads 808 Votes 15 Part Story
JTatum By JerRubieee Completed

Lies, Secrets,Drama and confusion..

HerbanLegend HerbanLegend Jun 21, 2015
I like how you write relatably but also still fairly grammatically correct. Sure there are a couple things here and there, but nothing a quick edit couldn't fix, and that's only if you wanted to fix em. 
                              
                              I think the intro could be a little bit longer and hook the reader in more.
                              
                              Keep writing :)
JackieBuckle JackieBuckle Aug 28, 2014
Your writing is very convincing and true to life. I think lots of young people will relate to this. Nice work