The Heartless Billionaire

The Heartless Billionaire

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playful_Me By playful_Me Updated Mar 04, 2015

As soon as I turn around, I gasped when I saw this beautiful creature that now stood in front of me, you could tell that under his tight fitted shirt that he has a very muscular body, I mean those forest green eyes had me captivated.

"Excuse me?" I blinked, realizing that he just spoke. His voice was so smooth that it had me paralyzed for a second

"Ah sorry," I said.

"You should stop staring,or are you just hypnotized by my handsome features," He replied cockily.

"Ugh, Arrogant bastard," I mutter, while walking out of Starbucks.

uchechi02 uchechi02 Jul 07, 2015
I like this book already but please I beg of you....use speech marks
lamiyalikespi lamiyalikespi Jun 16, 2015
the grammar could use some tweaking, and perhaps a bit more dialogue, it looks promising....
michelleabdou michelleabdou Apr 09, 2015
Please learn to use " " other wise I won't be able to read it
sims8x sims8x Mar 12, 2015
dialogue is important. over all its not so bad. im gonna keep reading and maybe dialogue will get better as i go. don't get discouraged lets see where it goes...;)
KerenHappuchBoiNai KerenHappuchBoiNai Mar 11, 2015
Disorganisation.  Dude the story's interesting but can you establish a dialogue?
WinterChills28 WinterChills28 Feb 21, 2015
@loverscall right. :) as much as i love how the stoy's going on, a "dialogue" should be establish, -.-