RWBY: First Contact

RWBY: First Contact

24.8K Reads 524 Votes 37 Part Story
Kiryu Jones By BladeofKiryu Completed

You are, all of you, vermin. Cowering in the dirt, thinking... what, I wonder? That you might escape the coming fire? No. Your world will burn until its surface is but glass! And not even your Demon will live to creep, blackened, from its hole to mar the reflection of our passage; the culmination of our Journey. For your destruction is the will of the gods! And I...I am their instrument!

(Just a disclaimer I didn't create RWBY or Halo)

Teleos Teleos Mar 28, 2015
...You need to use commas more often. I don't know why, but this is a very common problem I see on this website. Commas help create emotion. Without punctuation, nothing would really have any impact. Words would just come out as hollow and robotic.
- - Jan 15, 2015
This is a bad story, if you want to see some decent stories go to fanfiction.net, this will give you an idea of what a decent story looks like, overall this story is ****!
gmp1000 gmp1000 Jul 10, 2014
Omg is there anything you can do to make me love you any more? XD