Don't Try To Save Me

Don't Try To Save Me

7.7K Reads 163 Votes 16 Part Story
Rachael Renee By rachael_renee Updated May 27, 2011

After a fire that burns down Marnie and her mom's house, they move to Tennessee to live with her mom's friend, Liz, and her son, Colby. Marnie has never even heard of these people and she has to finnish up her senior year in a new state and new school where everyone calls her a freak for being mute. Marnie's mom has been keeping secrets from Marnie ever since Marnie's father died but those secrets come out.
The is something about Marnie that Colby can't understand. SHe's different from all the other girls he's dated. He feels a pull towards her but she won't talk to him and she wants nothing to do with him. He risks letting his secret out just to get close to her but being a shifter causes some problems for him. He is only supposed to feel a pull towards his mate and Marnie cant be his mate, she's human or is she?

bakane bakane May 01, 2011
You said u wanted my honest opion; here it is:
                              It was absoletly brilliant. I really like how u made the reader suck intno the story. It has a nice plot line and multiple twists and suprises along the way. voted! 
SavyJParker SavyJParker Apr 04, 2011
This is really good. Voted. Have you considered entering this into the watty awards? I think that you should do that.
- - Mar 31, 2011
Good job. I like it, one thing though. In your description, it says everything burned sown, I think you meant burned down. good job though. YOu have talent.
NikkyStorm NikkyStorm Mar 29, 2011
need a little revising but nice job its good. and im with SomeGirl v down there the first sentence should be split in 2 ... but any way great work keep writing you are going great.. voted 
marilynjacksonO marilynjacksonO Mar 28, 2011
great opening lines. it really drew me in and i love how it played out in my mind like a movie. good job. voted :D