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The Legend Of Rael: The Promise

The Legend Of Rael: The Promise

2.7K Reads 71 Votes 22 Part Story
Sheri Kagunda By Sheripie Updated Sep 02, 2015

The nation of Lour took everything from Asta when he was just just seven years old. His home, his family, his life. Now he is left with nothing but hatred for it and anyone from there. 
Carmiah had every part of her life planned out perfectly for her. She can't stand to live in this world of hers, and can't watch her family be torn apart for the sake of the Zer.
These two opposite people meet by chance... Or did they? 
A prophesy arises, a prophesy that was told of many years ago and repeated in different forms over the ages. It starts with the love of two people of different nations and class. Because of this prophesy, the entire human race will be redeemed. And it seems the prophesy involves these two young rebels.
They must battle evil that strives to make sure it never comes true. An evil betrothed, a friend that betrays, a Zer that rules, and Tanam himself.... The ultimate father of pain. Who will do anything in his power to stop them from fulfilling... The Promise

OctoberRaine OctoberRaine Nov 02, 2011
this is very good. Great description, flow, and overall varied vocabulary. It is also a good length for a prologue. I did not notice any spelling/grammer errors. Overall,  can't wait to read more!
Sheripie Sheripie Oct 24, 2011
@walkingsunshine Thank you so much for your feedback, it was really appreciated. If you were wondering, this part was written by my friend @totallycwazie with me hovering behind her talking about where we want this story to go. 
                              Will revise when we have time! Thanks again! :)
Sheripie Sheripie Oct 24, 2011
@revengefulkarma @mariposa99 @justreading96 @AnnieGil  Thank you all so much for your encouragement!
justreading96 justreading96 Sep 07, 2011
My friend told me about this story, i thought it would be good, but not THIS good. You really captured the emotions!
mariposa99 mariposa99 Sep 01, 2011
VERY creative, I can tell you that =D You have an good plot and awesome word choice!!
vengefulkarma vengefulkarma Sep 01, 2011
This is a really cool idea :D It flows well and your descriptions are good, too :)
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