Soul Stone

Soul Stone

1.4K Reads 41 Votes 11 Part Story
fiftyseventhcharger By fiftyseventhcharger Updated Apr 01, 2011

Zeke Alistair was just a fairly normal teenage boy drifting through life at the prestigious Hansen Academy because of financial aid from an emotionally distant Uncle, until a mysterious gift, and the beautiful but cold Sara Castle enter his life and he's drawn into a dangerous game of cat-and-mouse with an evil organization that may or may not be run from inside the school itself. With the help of the enigmatic Kael Chayse, the flirtatious Kaley Michael, energetic brawler Kyle Buzznick, a mysterious Janitor known as Sweeper, a mysterious gift, and of course Sara Castle, his "Sage", he sets about finding out just how far over his head he is in a conspiracy that hits entirely too close to home!

fiftyseventhcharger fiftyseventhcharger Apr 01, 2011
@treehugger11 
                              If you read on, things get explained a lot more :P
                              The whole point was that everything is somewhat of a mystery lol
                              You're kind of learning everything as it's revealed to the cast lol
                              Thanks for the input though, it's interesting to get some new perspective :D 
treehugger11 treehugger11 Apr 01, 2011
love the concept, nice and original. Just one thing, maybe you could do a prolog or something before going it to 5 pages of story. If you just took some of the info/ backstory and made a one page intro I think you could have a really good hook to get people even more interested in your story. :D
fiftyseventhcharger fiftyseventhcharger Apr 01, 2011
@ellamimikate @leamckee 
                              Thank you both :)
                              The suggestions are much appreciated, and the compliments mean a lot :D
                              As I've said though, the best is yet to come, so keep reading!
fiftyseventhcharger fiftyseventhcharger Apr 01, 2011
@vans_0916 
                              Haha Thanks :D
                              It's always encouraging to hear things like that!
vans_0916 vans_0916 Apr 01, 2011
i'm not into fantasy action...but urs definitely caught my attention :)
                              good writing! voted :)
fiftyseventhcharger fiftyseventhcharger Mar 29, 2011
@lucky97 
                              Haha thanks
                              I think this is the worst chapter I put out so far, though so keep reading
                              It gets better :D