Short story I wrote for school. This was more just to figure out how to use the site, but I hope you enjoy it all the same.
@DanceLikeTheWind XD Thank you!!! Really? :) Hehehe yeah, that's exactly what my english teacher said! XD hehe. Well I'm glad you liked it, and thank you for the feedback! XD xxrach
Wow this is REALLY good!! I think it's my favourite story you've written... :) The giant paragraphs are a bit daunting though... Maybe if you split them up more, people wouldn't run away before getting to the good bit...
really? well shunkya! I'm glad you like it! I really need more feedback about my work, it's frustrating that not many people comment, because comments really help your writing.