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Forgotten and Lost (on hold)

Forgotten and Lost (on hold)

951 Reads 21 Votes 7 Part Story
Secret Ninja~ By cedia98 Updated Feb 27, 2012

So this starteLife seemed perfect for Arya at the academy. She had great friends, good teachers, people who accepted her for who she was, then all chaos broke lose. Now friends are enemys, trying to kill her. Nowhere is safe and she has to constantly look behind her back. To make matters worse, the Elven Imperial Guard is after her. Now she and her only remaining friend, a shapeshifting dragon named Raven, must try and set things right, while keeping themselves safe at the same time. And to think that this all started over one powerful, little ring.

WishingStar97 WishingStar97 Jul 01, 2011
Very interesting idea! The beginning is good so far. Though, the fight scene at the start was a little confusing. Good job though :)
cedia98 cedia98 Jun 20, 2011
@Mellon305 Thanks! I have a tendency to look over things that I'm looking for. This helps out a lot! 
GenXblogger GenXblogger Jun 19, 2011
I like it when people start the story in the middle of the action however since you are talking immediately about binding spells and earth bolts it seems like something is missing, I don't know enough about the story to get really involved. 
Danaeble Danaeble May 18, 2011
I like the beginging, it's always smart to start out with a little mystery (: you've got a good idea! I like this story so far
cedia98 cedia98 May 18, 2011
@Laura_Nicole Thanks! That helps me out alot. I'll try and be more discriptive with their powers later on. Like there's a fight scene soon and I'm going to have them use alot of magic in that part. 
ToraLover ToraLover Apr 09, 2011
No matter how many times I read this, I still love it... >.<