The Grinning Man

The Grinning Man

1 Part Story 741 Reads 40 Votes
Liz, Lizzy By ElizabethShadow Completed

--The grinning man
    He's a sadistic man
    He likes to hear us cry
    
    He likes when we thrash about
    And beg and beg to die
    
    The Grinning man likes his gun
    But has us kiss his knife
    We listen to his whispers
    Then wish he'd end our life
    
    That grinning man has no name
    No face. No love. No sympathy.
    
    Nothing but fame.
    Absent of dignity.
    
    That man has for us no empathy.
    
    
    Little one scream in fear
    Grinning man oh grinning man
    Don't come near!......--
    
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YanelyRose15 YanelyRose15 Aug 07, 2015 08:50AM
He sounds like a rapist hahaha. honestly though it sounds like a rapist. this poem was very good
xXKitCatXx xXKitCatXx Feb 14, 2013 05:21AM
This seems like something i would write. This is pretty awesome. You should write more like this. I like it. ;) keep up the awesomeness
EVUHorror EVUHorror Aug 09, 2012 06:45PM
@ElizabethShadow I'll be sure to come back and reread it the day you tweak it around then! Until then keep up the awesome ideas.
@EVUHorror Thank you so much I'm so glad you say that, one day after this gets out of my head I'll be going back and teaking it but right now it's still too fresh but I completely agree and am grateful for your constructive critism it really helps XD thanks again
                                    <3 Liz
                                    Stay Beautiful
EVUHorror EVUHorror Aug 09, 2012 04:11PM
There were a few places I would have tweaked the wording so it would flow a little more smoothly but other than that this was amazing. It set a good mood and kept it up throughout the whole thing. I could just imagine the "Grinning Man" as I read this. Definitely going in my favorites reading list!
kickassdaisy kickassdaisy Aug 09, 2012 01:54AM
@ElizabethShadow T___T does that mean...... were back together?!?!? :O YAY!!!!!!!!! I LOVE YOU MY DARLING!!!!!!!! well.... looks like u and mermaid rapist are sharing me............. SEXUAL PARTY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! - dances on pole -
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