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Fantaisy world online I : New Roads

Fantaisy world online I : New Roads

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KarineMazouzi By KarineMazouzi Completed

Ben is a 22 years old single office worker living with his university student sister. His favorite thing in the world are mmorpg's. When RetroGame lunchs the first Virtual Reality mmorpg, he is one of the lucky ones selected to receive the Golden pack. Ben sets himself to become the Emperor of New Roads! Follow him as he tarts his aventure from scratch and builds his legend.  
A science fiction fantaisy adventure story with a bit of humor, romence, action and a lot of crasy happenings and twists!

Sized-> seized, grabed-> grabbed, startes-> starts, besed-> based
Breif-> brief, carring-> carrying, reache-> reach, Gollem-> Golem, bravour-> bravery
Lorddancer Lorddancer Apr 26
you need to clarify. is the gnoll wielding the rusty sword or the player? so either you could switch "a rusty curved sword" to "with its rusty curved sword" or "the player who has a rusty curved sword"
meals from because I wanted to continue the once a year meals correction.
Lorddancer Lorddancer Apr 26
some context is missing here. you need to clarify that it was getting close to x time or something. it really was confusing
Corrections; lether-> leather,  coton-> cotton, pouchs-> pouches, clothses-> clothes, deninition-> definition, arc-> bow, examinded-> examined