The Great Escape

The Great Escape

842 Reads 18 Votes 10 Part Story
kissndie228 By kissndie228 Updated Sep 09, 2012

Sophie had had enough when she saw the bruises on her sister's arm! She planned an escape for them which worked out until they met a guy who was hiding yet, in plain sight. then, strange things began to happen, was he a friend or a foe?

ZsaYad ZsaYad Jun 26, 2012
I can see this turning into a great story. Especially when it's about over coming something awful in life. Keep up the good work! A few grammar mistakes and spelling, but it's okay.
Blahhhh25 Blahhhh25 Jun 14, 2012
I agree with KristieH, so not much to say except you did have a few grammer mistakes. 
                              But other than that It's good, keep writing (:
KirstieH KirstieH Jun 11, 2012
I like it :) only its a little confusing in the end parts, you could describe the buildings and the ribbon more but other then that's it's good :)
theonlychild theonlychild Jun 11, 2012
That's so sweet, a sister relationship. I always wonder how it feels to have a sister. Lol. xD Your story has a good start in it, will definitely get your readers hooked up :))
PerfectlyAverage PerfectlyAverage Jun 10, 2012
I like this. It's a very intriguing start. The plot is very good, and I really like your main character.
AnnabelleSmithson AnnabelleSmithson May 23, 2012
I like how you Started the story. I really like the title too and Minus the mistakes..It was Really good! :)
                              
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