Sophie had had enough when she saw the bruises on her sister's arm! She planned an escape for them which worked out until they met a guy who was hiding yet, in plain sight. then, strange things began to happen, was he a friend or a foe?
I can see this turning into a great story. Especially when it's about over coming something awful in life. Keep up the good work! A few grammar mistakes and spelling, but it's okay.
I agree with KristieH, so not much to say except you did have a few grammer mistakes.
But other than that It's good, keep writing (:
I like it :) only its a little confusing in the end parts, you could describe the buildings and the ribbon more but other then that's it's good :)
That's so sweet, a sister relationship. I always wonder how it feels to have a sister. Lol. xD Your story has a good start in it, will definitely get your readers hooked up :))
I like this. It's a very intriguing start. The plot is very good, and I really like your main character.
I like how you Started the story. I really like the title too and Minus the mistakes..It was Really good! :)