The Fight never ends, even when the Fighter steps out of the ring.
Most of your sentences started the same way, with 'my legs', 'my body' and whatnot. Maybe you could try in changing the way you start them. Also, some of your paragraphs are too long. Some wattpaddians are chased away by long paragraphs. Just a suggestion. :)
I thought this easily brought me in. I didn't see any spelling mistakes in it which surprised me since there are usually one or two, so that made me very happy, and I loved the detail so all in all i think this is a really good story
I just like to say how beautifully this is written! its got so much detaile and everything is described so perfectly and its not boring either! its really immese and im curiouse to see what happens next :)
Wow! Great writing here, I love the way you introduce this story with such vivid imagery and such a fast, pulsing pace. I was definitely very intrigued reading this, good work!
This is good! I love hwo immediately you show the reader of this person trying so hard to breathe but failing. I think that's a powerful start to have! Well done.
Indeed, sets the seen well and it has emotion with in, The Imagerys good and the plott thickents. "Remember Thy Brother' :) Its unique and it leaves you wondering how far he can go...