The Eldest. The Heir.

The Eldest. The Heir.

2.3K Reads 27 Votes 2 Part Story
Mayan Albazain By MerMaydens Updated Apr 25, 2011

Being the eldest in the Kingdom of Nordike means a lot more if you're a female. Her father is the king, her lover is the kitchen help, and her fiancée is the prince of Alxan, a very sexist kingdom. She is forced to choose between two lives and, her choice will change everyones lives for good. She is the heir and she doesn't want any of it. Any of the power, any of the wealth, anything her father has to offer. She just wants to be with him, her kitchen help lover, Alexander. She is Princess Anastasia. Engaged to Prince Domonic. What is her decision?

wafa101 wafa101 Apr 16, 2013
This is entirely constructive...but you have too much description all at once and it's very "out right". Try a more gradual approach. Other than that the plot is amazing and very gripping, can't wait to read more! Keep it up!
BooksAreTheSoul BooksAreTheSoul Jul 07, 2012
You could say rouge for lipstick and kohl for eye liner.  I think foundation is powder and blush is also called rouge.
MerMaydens MerMaydens Mar 20, 2011
lol i've got it all planned out <3 haha and there's going to be a 2nd book to this. buh thnx lol (;