Lethal Misfits

Lethal Misfits

32.5K Reads 1.5K Votes 27 Part Story
Parnia Issiac By xxtypicalscorpianxx Completed

The last thing Iris Bradley needs is to be in debt of Johnny Law - who is all guns and troubles - but after realizing that this notorious guy is her last hope to set her life back on track, Iris throws all caution in air and joins his little group of lethal misfits. Witness the a maddening and dangerous adventure unfold...

You do know that there is an actual law? If you die and you have kids there's a certain percent of money that you HAVE to leave to them... Or maybe this is only in Italy...
I hate it when people tell you bad news and then invite you over as if it will make everything dandy.
@wordsbylana I am not sure, just found the pic on pinterest. I think he's a model
halccyon halccyon Jan 01, 2015
You use great description and i love when i can actually visualize your writing! this is a great first chapter!
bamboozled- bamboozled- Nov 27, 2014
I find this first chapter quite interesting and I also like your use of humor here and there. There were a few punctuation errors, though. Proofreading will help you correct those small mistakes.
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ashily101 ashily101 Oct 01, 2014
This was a really good introduction to your story! You developed the characters really well and created great imagery with your descriptions. Overall, i really enjoyed reading this :) good work!