The Unknown (On Hold)

The Unknown (On Hold)

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Potato By Songless Updated Nov 30, 2011

Through these pages you will see through eyes of Ella–The girl who everyone thought was perfect–but was not.

evangheline evangheline Jul 05, 2011
@arfie14 yes really, dialogue is my biggest struggle, description is more my area lol, so I loved how this flowed :-)
evangheline evangheline Jul 05, 2011
Makes me wonder what is wrong with Dana, great job at hinting that there is a sickness, also wonderful vivid description of the kitchen, I could see it clearly in my mind and it flowed smoothely
evangheline evangheline Jul 05, 2011
Great begining, I love the dialogue, it seems to be your strength, it comes very naturaly, great job!