Yuriko thought going to an amusement park would just be something fun, but when a long forgotten memory bubbles to the surface, it might just become a life changing experience.
Hi! I'm kind of confused about the first sentence. " a girl sat on the chair facing away the table to which it belonged"
Maybe my mind is in a wrecked state.
But what does the first sentence mean?
Overall, i really like your description. it gives me a vivid imagination!
Thak you I'll try.
I hadn't acctually realized there was a lack of emotion ( maybe because my main character is stoic until she gets mad or frustrated XD) I'll try to change that :)
Thank you so much for leaving a comment that I can easily work with!
I'm correcting my mistakes now and hope you will like the new version.
Much Love ( I mean it ),
Mmmm.... I've already thought about the plot and everything - and the prequel, but so far I've had no time to start writing... I will do so eventually ( I hope soon XD)
Thanks for voting :D
It's a great story and I really like it. Even though you've written that it's done I think you should continue writing.
Thank you :)
By elaborating on characters, do you mean I should let them think more?