The Roller Coaster's Memory

The Roller Coaster's Memory

355 Reads 12 Votes 1 Part Story
Lizzy By nebelsaengerin Completed

Yuriko thought going to an amusement park would just be something fun, but when a long forgotten memory bubbles to the surface, it might just become a life changing experience.

icecream2468 icecream2468 Apr 03, 2011
Hi! I'm kind of confused about the first sentence. " a girl sat on the chair facing away the table to which it belonged" 
                              
                              Maybe my mind is in a wrecked state. 
                              
                              But what does the first sentence mean?
                              
                              Overall, i really like your  description. it gives me a vivid imagination!
nebelsaengerin nebelsaengerin Mar 24, 2011
@oceantoodeep 
                              Thak you I'll try.
                              I hadn't acctually realized there was a lack of emotion ( maybe because my main character is stoic until she gets mad or frustrated XD) I'll try to change that :)
nebelsaengerin nebelsaengerin Mar 23, 2011
@dramatic-chikk11 
                              Thank you so much for leaving a comment that I can easily work with!
                              I'm correcting my mistakes now and hope you will like the new version.
                              Much Love ( I mean it ),
                              Liz
nebelsaengerin nebelsaengerin Mar 19, 2011
@ChrissieXP 
                              Mmmm.... I've already thought about the plot and everything - and the prequel, but so far I've had no time to start writing... I will do so eventually ( I hope soon XD)
                              Thanks for voting :D
ChrissieXP ChrissieXP Mar 18, 2011
It's a great story and I really like it. Even though you've written that it's done I think you should continue writing.
nebelsaengerin nebelsaengerin Mar 13, 2011
Thank you :)
                              By elaborating on characters, do you mean I should let them think more?