Love in the Stars | James Kirk [1]

Love in the Stars | James Kirk [1]

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e. denise By CrazyDreamGirl Completed

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Dia Pike is the daughter of Admiral Pike. She just graduated StarFleet Academy. She gets to be on the Enterprise. She meets Captain Kirk. She falls in love but she can't have him. He's to far away. Well that's what she thought. Did Kirk love her too?

(Completed: July 21, 2014)

Good start, your first paragraph was a little rough, it was a bit too much tell and not enough show or explain. Other than that it was fairly well written for a prologue, and has me interested in reading more.
Araceli1414 Araceli1414 Sep 15, 2016
Captain Pike is THE best father figure. I keep saying this, I know.
PerseveranceIsMe PerseveranceIsMe Dec 18, 2016
Something interesting, they actually got rid of the death penalty. Not trying to nag just attempting to be helpful.