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Forever Mates

Forever Mates

155K Reads 2.6K Votes 22 Part Story
Kelsey23 By Kelsey23 Completed

Heyy guys :)

This is my second story on here and I'd love if you would offer some feedback cuzz i have nooo idea how im doing haha. Well anyyways i hope you enjoy Forever mates :)) Vote, Comment, Anything!! :) 

EmersonsWish EmersonsWish Aug 14, 2016
I do like this so far, but I'm not sure how I feel about the POV switching. I would suggest saving the switches for individual chapters, and what they were saying about Ronny seemed a little repetitive at times.
jkshakespeare jkshakespeare Mar 20, 2011
I'm impressed, though try putting some spacing in it to make it a bit neater and easier to read.