Im his obsession

Im his obsession

4.1K Reads 104 Votes 23 Part Story
Ericka By Ericaa-Mariee Updated Aug 30

Amber lees your average girl and just like all girls she goes through mishaps but when it comes to love things fall apart and the life of herself and the people she love are at risk..Was being with him all a mistake or was it all worth it in the end?

Zara1692 Zara1692 Feb 02, 2013
a few grammatical errors but other than that it's good. i am thinking the meeting between the two was a bit rushed but maybe it'll all be explained in the next chapters?
JenSun JenSun Feb 02, 2013
brilliant start, a little grammatical errors but no big thing. voted :)
markkram markkram Jun 11, 2011
Ok.    Speach is good and realistic. Like the storyline so far. 
                              
                              Gonna read on. 
                              
                              Great stuff.  Voted* 
                              
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superfastjellyfish superfastjellyfish Mar 31, 2011
i think it's a really good story and that you are a talented writer. just watch the grammar, and the conversations need to slow down a bit.some parts i had to re-read a few times before i got it but aside from that its a great story!  
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silverlightwing silverlightwing Mar 27, 2011
Good start, might want to edit it a bit, but it's really good so far :)