Finding Andria

Finding Andria

351 Reads 10 Votes 6 Part Story
PichanDesu By PichanDesu Updated Jan 31, 2015

There are some secrets and questions that hadn't need to be known and answered. But when Charles ended up exactly where those mysteries lies he was determined to be one of them. Andria wasn't just someone who knows the answers, she was a knight, and in finding her, lies the destiny of unlocking the true form of the world, and having the vengeance Charles had been hoping for.

ZaSmoke ZaSmoke May 21, 2012
Nice concept could fix the layout so its more clear but the plot is unique and interesting voted
im_a_dork im_a_dork May 21, 2012
just spread it out because i lost my place a few times x) but well written!
PichanDesu PichanDesu May 21, 2012
@Idiedandsurvived can you point w/c grammar are? I can't locate them even I'm using microsoft word. Help...
                              
                              I'm currently reading you story now :)
Idiedandsurvived Idiedandsurvived May 21, 2012
Still a few grammer mistakes, but the spacing is good :) It's sad that his sister died though :(
Idiedandsurvived Idiedandsurvived May 21, 2012
You should spread it out some, like in paragraphs to help readers to not get lost while reading. Found some mistakes, but they can be fixed if  you read though a few times. Other then those two things it is a good start.
Ashez55 Ashez55 May 20, 2012
Interesting beginning. Grammar is an issue here, not to be mean. Maybe posting your chapters on Microsoft Word and using spellcheck would improve it? Otherwise your story is good. :)