He who....

He who....

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Rebecca (but call me beckii) By missmusicxx Updated Mar 10, 2011

when he came in the house i ran i heard gun shots i covered my eyes then i heard slience......

missmusicxx missmusicxx Mar 10, 2011
@Nixie_Pixie lol i know u get annoyed by that but i will just for u xx and thank you 
Amelia_Young Amelia_Young Mar 10, 2011
Okay Im going to be a little mean, not that I dont like the poem because it is awesome :)
                              Can you please add comma's and full stops, also put your I's in captitals :)
                              I wonder who 'he' is ??
                              For a first publish this is really really good :)
                              
                              Amber