Half Life

Half Life

114 Reads 22 Votes 14 Part Story
Tock AC By TockAC Updated Nov 14

After the sudden death of her beloved brother Jack, Penny goes on a trip to find her brother by recreating every memory that they ever shared.  #TheMermaidProject #FloTee2019

"New chapters every Tuesday"

*title inspired by the song by Imogen Heap of the same name
*this story will feature poetry and song lyrics in each chapter

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Good opening chapter, it almost feels like the two section are extracts from a diary.
I like how you've opened the story. You have given the readers a good amount of background information without it feeling rushed or too much 
                              
                              I would miss out the word driving at the beginning because you've already called her the driver, so it's not needed.