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Big Apple Baby

Big Apple Baby

16.3K Reads 209 Votes 9 Part Story
Serena By bleeding_heart357 Updated Feb 29, 2012

Riley, 16 year old, beautiful, popular, kind hearted, all in all perfect girl that has the perfect life. Nice boyfriend, awesome family and great friends. So when she finds out she's pregnant her life turns upside down. She flee's to New York in need of an escape. What she doesn't expect is what she will find in the big apple... Love?

MidnightDancing MidnightDancing Mar 05, 2012
hmm...  logan lerman?  can i tell ya FEMININE BONER!!(:  I love me some Logan Lerman(:
                              
                              Great story line!  I think imma fan...  yeah,, I wanna..  hehehe(:
ScandalousWithAD ScandalousWithAD May 03, 2011
relli good...be careful of yr dialogue @Sentogray  agreeable totally goooddd job.vote n fanned
BrionyHeneberry BrionyHeneberry May 03, 2011
I'm with xStephx on this one. For clarity it is always really important that each time a new person speaks, you start their dialogue on a new line. 
                              Narrative that also does not follow on from that dialogue should also start on a new line.
                              
                              More on the story next chapter.
zepharo zepharo May 02, 2011
Good start. I really like it. Keep up with the good work (:
                              
                              Voted.
StephyWrites StephyWrites May 02, 2011
Cool story, I like the plot, reminds me of Juno. A few spelling, grammar and punctuation mistakes that you could go over and edit. Also when you have dialogue, every time a new speakers starts, you go to the next line. Voted (:
farawaykiss farawaykiss May 02, 2011
haha interesting. liking the concept. the chapter is a bit short for my liking, but i think that this is good either way, voted.