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Burning Water (In process of editing and re-writing)

Burning Water (In process of editing and re-writing)

9K Reads 332 Votes 20 Part Story
M. Charles:D By charlesD Updated Jul 03, 2011

Being an orphan is hard. No family. No home. No normality. But just as things lighten up, strange things happen. A mist. A green 'traveling' mist. The orphans get taken through the mist and end up in the impossible. Zuchon. A flat world with creatures of every color and kind. But that's not the worst that happens; A battle is coming up, and it's not gong to be pretty. Weird dreams and visions come to Lily and Jason. Some tell them things, others just are. Discomforting drawings and symbols appear. Evil is rising. But there is a good side. And they will do anything for evil to stop. Even die.

charlesD charlesD May 30, 2012
@DreamedDreams @BisolaOnaolapo @thepursuitofbeing @mBeOgOa    Thank you all for your critiques/praises/etc. I appreciate them all :)
SyannePotts SyannePotts May 26, 2012
You're really talented with details, and descriptions, love the ending, great Prolougue
AlarmAtTheDisco AlarmAtTheDisco May 26, 2012
I loved this! So mysterious! I love how it starts and the word choice you use and I love how you ended it... it was burning water!
charlesD charlesD May 26, 2012
@x_Jackelyn_x @phantomx @m00ngrl67 thank you for reading and commenting, Im glad you've liked it (or faked liking it...) anyway, hopes for the best! 
                              ~MCD (waddle your writing feet to your dreams!)
charlesD charlesD May 26, 2012
@AsTheWindBlows Thank you very much, I;ll take those words to heart <3 :)
oceantxdes oceantxdes May 26, 2012
This prologue is awesome. I have no others words to describe it. I loved how well you wrote this. Your details are great and that first paragraph really captured my attention. I always enjoyed reading these types of stories, so I really, really liked this. Great start!