I Love You, I Love You Not, I Love You, I Love Your Brother

I Love You, I Love You Not, I Love You, I Love Your Brother

26K Reads 213 Votes 22 Part Story
Esther By Wandering_Round Completed

Two Brothers. One girl. What couldn't go wrong? Rachel and Marco have been friends since childhood but Marco's older brother, Matthew only got with Rachel to spite him. When lessons are learned and veiws are changing, which brother will Rachel get and is that the one she wants?

bella_bloom bella_bloom Oct 09, 2010
honestly, i read your story becausee of the grammar. when a new person speaks its a new line. Also, Its a bit confusing... And way to short. 
RebelAngel RebelAngel Jul 08, 2010
Spread your writing out. It helps to read it easier. Great start.
17xoxo 17xoxo Mar 01, 2010
oh my god!!! what an ass!!
                              
                              typical, just typical. awsome start really draws the ready in
                              
                              xoxo