A Lie Untwined

A Lie Untwined

8.2K Reads 300 Votes 22 Part Story
Christian By purpleskies Updated Jul 17, 2015

Her names Amber she sixteen years old and she has three best friends. She lives alone because her dad and step mom are always away on business.... or are they? She likes Kyle one of her best friends but then there's the desperate girl named Hayley, who will do anything to get Kyle.  There's also a BIG secret being kept from Amber that will destroy some Relationships....

loveanddestinyxoxo loveanddestinyxoxo Feb 09, 2013
Interesting story but can improve it! Double check on the commas  and grammar, for example, "inside door pool" I think you meant "indoor pool" those things are often overlooked so don't worry but I'd fix em up!
EnchantingDragon EnchantingDragon Jul 21, 2012
Definitely liked this chapter so far, good detail, good thought process, voted! XD
purpleskies purpleskies Jul 21, 2012
@ChristinaChannelle 
                              Thanks Im looking to get an editor that doesnt leave me hanging and you are welcome to read the other chapters 
                              Thanks I Appreciate it
xclicktoaddtitlex xclicktoaddtitlex Jul 20, 2012
It would be better if you add more detail and description, but I think its good for a first chapter. I'm voting!
SMspartan SMspartan Jul 20, 2012
Needs some more detail in it just to add. But pretty good so far for a first story;)
Thatoneisafighter Thatoneisafighter Jul 20, 2012
Theirs no intro so i was confused about who the people were and their was really no details