For vampire lovers.
    “Dance with me,” Anton requested, voice husky with yearning, eyes wide and imploring. 
    The monster was not in his eyes. They were calm, considerate and entirely for her. 
    It was Ruby's idea for her and her sisters to go grave robbing and save their father from the wrath of his creditors. She knew it wouldn't be a pleasant experience to steal from a corpse but what happens when they unearth more than they bargained for? Ruby's blood unleashes a darkness, one that claims to love her, one that threatens to consume her, one she must fight with every heartbeat.
What's the video on the side called? It looks like contemporary dance. I like it.
Man this is good stuff, I love your style of writing. The amount of metaphors and similes are really good. I love how you compare each of the facial features. The discription you use is simply magnificent!
At first when they mentioned Ruby I thought they were talking about the gem LOL
Wow. I can tell that you are a very talented writer just by reading these two pages! looking forward to reading the rest of the story!
I like how Anastasia justifies what they are about to do. Very well written (hurray for vampire fics that do not sparkle!).
This paragraph is structured beautifully! You're a lyrical writer who has an amazing grasp of sensory imagery! :)