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Don't hate the player hate the Game

Don't hate the player hate the Game

44.1K Reads 575 Votes 24 Part Story
starr_west101 By starr_west101 Completed

Zonnique Miller is at the bottom of the high school food chain. The popular kids always have something rude to say to her, especially Raquan Smith. Zonnique just wants to get through senior year as fast as possible without any drama. Raquan is a big player, he’s captain of the basketball team, always has groupies chasing after him, but he doesn’t mind. Then they get partnered for an year long English project, to get know each other. Zonnique really isn’t the kind of girl Raquan looks for, but if she’s selling he’ll buy it. Too bad Zonnique isn’t putting out. But, Zonnque soon learns Raquan’s secrets and he finds out her’s. Will this project lead them to something more than a newly found friendship?

angellover254 angellover254 Jul 09, 2012
It was a very good start! I really like how you began the story with the music and the dancing! :) You had nice descriptions and all but try to separate the one paragraph you have. Make it longer and divide it to smaller paragraphs, developing your chapter more :)
Monica4242 Monica4242 Jul 07, 2012
It's not bad :) I would suggest longer chapters and maybe spacing between the ideas so that it won't be a whole block. Oh and you should probably remove the characters description and just let the readers figure them out while you're writing your story.
                              I voted :) Keep writing!