Water Girl (Original)

Water Girl (Original)

58.2K Reads 672 Votes 25 Part Story
Janelle By JLGrenon Completed

Her dirty blonde hair was soft and light. She had a smile on her face and it was wide and beautiful. She was beautiful. I knew that most guys that stared at her mostly kept slipping to her chest, and when I talked to my friends, I said the same thing. But I couldn’t stop looking into her eyes. They were vibrant and blue and when I stared into them, it was like she was really looking at me. Something about her was so... irresistable.

SoyxMilk SoyxMilk Feb 26, 2014
Wait why does she have no friends, but she's dating a jock ("Channing")
mismatchedsocks99 mismatchedsocks99 Mar 26, 2011
It's great however i don't really understand the beginning but good job!!!
lucky97 lucky97 Mar 24, 2011
Very cute! I would reccomend adding more description. You are rushing things a little. However, it is adorable:)
The15ReasonsWhy The15ReasonsWhy Mar 22, 2011
So awesome! I love how Luke seems so genuine! He is so sweet! I wonder what his friend meant by "ruin that relationship too.." Hmmm.. Well, I guess I gotta go find out huh?
                              
The15ReasonsWhy The15ReasonsWhy Mar 22, 2011
OHHH! I love this so far! 
                              Lol, my friend down there below me told me that I had to read it, and I trust her judgement! This is beyond amazing so far and I seriously can't wait to read more! I wonder why this doesn't have more reads/ comments? Hmmm...  Well, I am off to chapter one! ^.^
JLGrenon JLGrenon Mar 21, 2011
@SilentWordsSpeakMore 
                              
                              Finally some helpful cristism !!! I'm actually surprised that I didn't notice because normally I do. I will go back and change it. By the way, I loved your story Banter and can't wait for more.