Safety

Safety

9.8K Reads 195 Votes 16 Part Story
Natasha By Lisamarie468 Updated Aug 17, 2011

Lana thought everything was over when a man was convicted for the attempted murder of her and the murder of her family but when the killer keeps appearing again and again, all she can do is keep running and hope she stays ahead of him. But things change when she goes to college and must stay with a man named Kyle and his older brother. Who is an FBI agent. Hoperfully this change will finally bring an end to her nightmare.

ducksnleaves ducksnleaves Sep 26, 2011
this moved really fast.  maybe a tiny bit too fast? anyways, its good
ColorfulQuirks ColorfulQuirks Aug 09, 2011
Great introduction. This has loads of potential. But I don't understand why you capitalize the word 'him'. I understand that there's supposed to be an emphasis, but lowercase works fine. Good job though, I voted.
helloimbailey helloimbailey Aug 06, 2011
I love your cover! This story is really interesting...I like it! I hope your story does well, because it has great potential! (:
burninglilacs burninglilacs Aug 06, 2011
This is a really good book you'd have to be a heartless person to send you daughter away in those situations.  I find it hard to believe that but that's because my dad's so great.  Keep writing I know you'll go somewhere :)
tianajade tianajade Aug 05, 2011
A good start, although I was a little confused at times with which was in the past and present. But your writing flowed at a decent pace and some of your descriptions were good. Your storyline sounds interesting, too. Nice work so far and keep on writing (:
dialupthesun dialupthesun Aug 02, 2011
Wow! This is really amazing, though I'm hating her dad atm =]
                              Continue the great work!