into the Rain

into the Rain

340 Reads 27 Votes 1 Part Story
the Million-Eyed Monster By ForxThexWin Updated Mar 06, 2011

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ForxThexWin ForxThexWin Jul 04, 2011
@Intrepid_Imaginer whhy thank you i choose to take that as a compliment :D
Intrepid_Imaginer Intrepid_Imaginer Jul 04, 2011
Interesting concept! I've never seen anything like this. @tyguy777 
x_PenHolder_x x_PenHolder_x Jul 01, 2011
this is just as amazing as your other poem. The voice is very clear on what you were trying to show and it brings out the suffering and ever growing weakness of its main character. 
                              you also space out and lay out your lines and stanzas purposefully, and I love that!
ACoolCat ACoolCat Jun 28, 2011
This poem was emotional and you could feel the girls despair. I also asked my friend what she thought and she thought it was very touching and the rhyming was really good!
ForxThexWin ForxThexWin Jun 28, 2011
@write4ever cool, ill look into it....whats ur book called?
                              
Folona Folona May 18, 2011
This is very nice and emotional only thing I can say to improve this is watch yours i's you tend to not do them as capitals when you are supposed too.
                              Other than that well done 
                              *voted*