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Hazy Future*On Hold*

Hazy Future*On Hold*

2.1K Reads 34 Votes 5 Part Story
LotsaLuv By LotsaLuv Updated Apr 24, 2011

Emily Hazze is an FBI agent. When her last partner dies on the job she declares that she will never have another partner. But when new bad boy Drake Winters ends up with the FBI she is chosen as his partner. Will she be able to get over her last partner and will he ever be able to trust her? Or will one of them quite when it gets to be too much?

karlylikespancaes karlylikespancaes Aug 14, 2011
this is horrible.
                              x.x maybe you should stop putting HAHA's and use things like IS.
heyhannah92 heyhannah92 Apr 09, 2011
There are a couple grammar errors, but it's not that big of a deal.  Maybe if you went back and fixed it, your story would flow better.  Your plot is awesome though!!  I love the story, and I can't wait to read the rest!!  
JustKindaCrazy JustKindaCrazy Apr 07, 2011
I'd like to see some more descriptions. Especially, when they're being shot at in the car. You want to be able to feel like you're there with the characters, and it seemed a little too rushed to feel like that. It has a TON of potential though! I'm gonna keep reading now :)
LoneWolf9402 LoneWolf9402 Apr 07, 2011
This is a really good story. Just follow the advice as other people listed and with your next chapter will be better! looking forward to it! good luck with the awards!
                              voted for ya :)
- - Apr 03, 2011
Good job. Please remember to read mine! I liked your story a lot.
MissRaRa MissRaRa Apr 03, 2011
This is really good, voted (good luck for watty awards :P) there are a few typos here or there, but we all fall victim to their charm once in a while. Also a few punctuation things here or there, but nothing serious, and It certainly has a hook to it. =]