Whisper

9 Part Story 3.3K Reads 106 Votes
Alison Mason By Alliex Updated a year ago
After the death of her mother, Aria moves to a different state to start a new life. With an apartment that is falling apart and a job with little money, she struggles to cope. Her friend and co-worker, Paige, asks her to accompany her to a night club. Unsure, Aria decides to go anyway. In the rough areas of downtown, the night club Eternity is situated in a dark alley way. Once Aria and Paige arrive, Aria starts to relax. However, after only being in the club for an hour a gang burst in. Pale skin, sharp teeth and red eyes, Aria runs for her life away from these creatures. Will she escape or will she fall prey to the vampire's whisper?
Ah, this was pretty nice. I could feel your main character's anger. Even though I don't really read vampires stories on Wattpad, I'll have to say this was pretty decent. 
                                    
                                    I found a few errors:
                                    
                                    ►"... Worse that it is today." (YOu mean worse THAN it is today?)
                                    
                                    ►unconsious (wrong)
                                    
                                    Correct spelling is unconscious
                                    
                                    Other than that, well done :D
Ah, this was pretty nice. I could feel your main character's anger. Even though I don't really read vampires stories on Wattpad, I'll have to say this was pretty decent. 
                                    
                                    I found a few errors:
                                    
                                    ►"... Worse that it is today." (YOu mean worse THAN it is today?)
                                    
                                    ►unconsious (wrong)
                                    
                                    Correct spelling is unconscious
                                    
                                    Other than that, well done :D
Ah, this was pretty nice. I could feel your main character's anger. Even though I don't really read vampires stories on Wattpad, I'll have to say this was pretty decent. 
                                    
                                    I found a few errors:
                                    
                                    ►"... Worse that it is today." (YOu mean worse THAN it is today?)
                                    
                                    ►unconsious (wrong)
                                    
                                    Correct spelling is unconscious
                                    
                                    Other than that, well done :D
Ah, this was pretty nice. I could feel your main character's anger. Even though I don't really read vampires stories on Wattpad, I'll have to say this was pretty decent. 
                                    
                                    I found a few errors:
                                    
                                    ►"... Worse that it is today." (YOu mean worse THAN it is today?)
                                    
                                    ►unconsious (wrong)
                                    
                                    Correct spelling is unconscious
                                    
                                    Other than that, well done :D
Ah, this was pretty nice. I could feel your main character's anger. Even though I don't really read vampires stories on Wattpad, I'll have to say this was pretty decent. 
                                    
                                    I found a few errors:
                                    
                                    ►"... Worse that it is today." (YOu mean worse THAN it is today?)
                                    
                                    ►unconsious (wrong)
                                    
                                    Correct spelling is unconscious
                                    
                                    Other than that, well done :D
Ah, this was pretty nice. I could feel your main character's anger. Even though I don't really read vampires stories on Wattpad, I'll have to say this was pretty decent. 
                                    
                                    I found a few errors:
                                    
                                    ►"... Worse that it is today." (YOu mean worse THAN it is today?)
                                    
                                    ►unconsious (wrong)
                                    
                                    Correct spelling is unconscious
                                    
                                    Other than that, well done :D