Mindless Travels (NEW and IMPROVED)

Mindless Travels (NEW and IMPROVED)

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LeonardoRead By LeonardoRead Updated Mar 05, 2011

Simon Harper has always loved his country all his life. But when his former FBI colleague, Marty, goes missing, he is determined to find out why. What does it have to do with the man he meets in the hospital? Why did Marty even mention about a vault? What kind of mystery will he unravel
Jacob Breeze has always be the smart one, the deep thinker and the one with good looks. But now he doesn't even know who he is. What does he have to do with the gril named Sarah Sellers. He has no idea except the fact he gets a heart attack everytime he stares at her picture. First he needs to figure out who he is but now he has to figure out why he's even involved in this whole conspiracy.
Sarah Sellers has only one thing she remembers. That she was an engineer working in the government. But when she finds herself in a Russian police office, she's determined to know why she ended up there. She suddenly finds herself tangled up in a war against the government and a secret conspiracy that is left unsolved. What does this have to do with the photographs she finds in her room or the weird device that she finds in her pocket?

LeonardoRead LeonardoRead Mar 14, 2011
Comment and vote please. If it sucks please write it on the comment so i can know. No response makes it confusing.
danielleb333 danielleb333 Mar 06, 2011
This is very good, good use of imagry in some parts. Its very well written for a new author;. you have my vote. congrats and hope your english project does well :D
                              
                              ~Danielle
LeonardoRead LeonardoRead Mar 06, 2011
Can any of you guys give me inputs? would be really helpful, this is for my english creative writing story. Going to make a trilogy out of this. please help