try it out
I love the bitchy girl and every thing but I'm curious about the three year old horse.....is the horse broke I mean did the girl in the book train the horse?
very good, if you can tell more interesting stories about you and Tabby, I think, that will be better.
Sorry XD but im only in grade 8 so please dont expect this to be perfect considering this is my first ever story
its pretty good i think it has a lot of drama which i like good work! ;D
Instead of capitalizing words to make it seem as though the character is yelling, use descriptive words. Adjectives, adverbs and nouns are your friend.
Try using capitalizations and good end marks and way better grammar. Describe more because I am sorry to say it, but things written badly do not catch other's attention so that is what you need. :)