being a horse would be so much better

being a horse would be so much better

13.9K Reads 101 Votes 14 Part Story
Jessica! By horselovergirl666 Updated Jan 30, 2012

try it out

pony2CT pony2CT Apr 02, 2013
I love the bitchy girl and every thing but I'm curious about the three year old horse.....is the horse broke I mean did the girl in the book train the horse?
WangTinwah WangTinwah Jun 27, 2012
very good, if you can tell more interesting stories about you and Tabby, I think, that will be better.
horselovergirl666 horselovergirl666 Jun 26, 2012
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                              Sorry XD but im only in grade 8 so please dont expect this to be perfect considering this is my first ever story
mavinfor3v3r mavinfor3v3r Sep 12, 2011
its pretty good i think it has a lot of drama which i like good work! ;D
TessaSupplee TessaSupplee Aug 14, 2011
Instead of capitalizing words to make it seem as though the character is yelling, use descriptive words. Adjectives, adverbs and nouns are your friend.
amkara amkara Jul 15, 2011
Try using capitalizations and good end marks and way better grammar. Describe more because I am sorry to say it, but things written badly do not catch other's attention so that is what you need. :)