Loving You More

Loving You More

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Ari By Gotta_Luv_It Updated Mar 07, 2011

Chloe Durance was a girl with everything. She had THE boyfriend. THE body. THE friends. THE house. Even THE phone. But everything goes crashing down when a new boy comes to town and starts making her feel doubtful. She can't stop thinking about him. Can't stop talking about him. She even has dreams about him. But a little problem. She still has Eron, her boyfriend. Has Chloe created a love triangle?

Shannyeight Shannyeight Mar 07, 2011
other than some spelling errors, it was okay...just needs to go a little further.
                              
                              if i were doing just a mechanics assessment, then yes, you can write sex scenes/love making scenes...but stories are much more than that. so I will wait and see if there is more...keep writing!
Bloodynewmoon Bloodynewmoon Mar 07, 2011
A bunch of spelling/grammar mistakes, but it's alright. owob