This story is in the midst of being completely redone. It will continue to be a teen/ realistic fiction, but it is still debatable whether or not the story will develop into a series.
Wow.. Honestly, that was a little difficult to read. Too many run-ons and grammatical errors. Good start, but needs to be edited.
@TheVampiress Thanks. and thanks for pointing out the mistakes
Good job! Some run on sentences and you said "theirs" instead of "there's."
I think that its very interesting and It makes me want to read on. good job and keep it up! ;D
Thanks and I will shorten my sentences for sure and I will work on everything else you told me I should do becuase i appericate people giving me advice on how to make my stories better!
please comment and tell me what you think. please dont forget to corret me if i made any mistakes like punctuion, run on sentences or any thing. Also tell me if I should continue writting this story! please.
comment and enjoy