Poetry Of Mae

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Melody Wilson By SecretMae Updated 3 years ago
A collection of poetry created by the author,  Melody Wilson (SecretMae). The poetry in this book is of different genre's and was wrote with compassion. All poetry herein are the original works of the author and is under copyright. Each poem is entered as a new chapter for better viewing for the reader. All poems can also be found on the author's personal website. www.SecretMae.webs.com
    
    All poems are written by Melody Wilson © copyright - All Rights Reserved
You're doing good Mae. But you have to lean to cut the excess fat out of the lines. words like "such, just, all, of, ly's and ing's" these things will slow a poem into confusion. You really could cut all the "just's" out of the poem. Just so you know just what to do, just in time. If you get my meaning. The opening line is too telling. It needs to be cut. and make the words the subject in the next line. Don't give the reader any more that what they need to get to the watering hole. When they get there let them drink on their own. Don't define or tell or describe the meaning of the poem to them. Let them have their own epiphany. It's vital. It will make the reader part of the poem and they will walk away with it in their pocket. If interested in writing better check out my class on Yuku. 
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                                    a poet friend
                                    RH peat
You're doing good Mae. But you have to lean to cut the excess fat out of the lines. words like "such, just, all, of, ly's and ing's" these things will slow a poem into confusion. You really could cut all the "just's" out of the poem. Just so you know just what to do, just in time. If you get my meaning. The opening line is too telling. It needs to be cut. and make the words the subject in the next line. Don't give the reader any more that what they need to get to the watering hole. When they get there let them drink on their own. Don't define or tell or describe the meaning of the poem to them. Let them have their own epiphany. It's vital. It will make the reader part of the poem and they will walk away with it in their pocket. If interested in writing better check out my class on Yuku. 
                                    http://schoolofpoetry.yuku.com/forums/66/Public-Forum
                                    a poet friend
                                    RH peat
You're doing good Mae. But you have to lean to cut the excess fat out of the lines. words like "such, just, all, of, ly's and ing's" these things will slow a poem into confusion. You really could cut all the "just's" out of the poem. Just so you know just what to do, just in time. If you get my meaning. The opening line is too telling. It needs to be cut. and make the words the subject in the next line. Don't give the reader any more that what they need to get to the watering hole. When they get there let them drink on their own. Don't define or tell or describe the meaning of the poem to them. Let them have their own epiphany. It's vital. It will make the reader part of the poem and they will walk away with it in their pocket. If interested in writing better check out my class on Yuku. 
                                    http://schoolofpoetry.yuku.com/forums/66/Public-Forum
                                    a poet friend
                                    RH peat
You're doing good Mae. But you have to lean to cut the excess fat out of the lines. words like "such, just, all, of, ly's and ing's" these things will slow a poem into confusion. You really could cut all the "just's" out of the poem. Just so you know just what to do, just in time. If you get my meaning. The opening line is too telling. It needs to be cut. and make the words the subject in the next line. Don't give the reader any more that what they need to get to the watering hole. When they get there let them drink on their own. Don't define or tell or describe the meaning of the poem to them. Let them have their own epiphany. It's vital. It will make the reader part of the poem and they will walk away with it in their pocket. If interested in writing better check out my class on Yuku. 
                                    http://schoolofpoetry.yuku.com/forums/66/Public-Forum
                                    a poet friend
                                    RH peat
You're doing good Mae. But you have to lean to cut the excess fat out of the lines. words like "such, just, all, of, ly's and ing's" these things will slow a poem into confusion. You really could cut all the "just's" out of the poem. Just so you know just what to do, just in time. If you get my meaning. The opening line is too telling. It needs to be cut. and make the words the subject in the next line. Don't give the reader any more that what they need to get to the watering hole. When they get there let them drink on their own. Don't define or tell or describe the meaning of the poem to them. Let them have their own epiphany. It's vital. It will make the reader part of the poem and they will walk away with it in their pocket. If interested in writing better check out my class on Yuku. 
                                    http://schoolofpoetry.yuku.com/forums/66/Public-Forum
                                    a poet friend
                                    RH peat
You're doing good Mae. But you have to lean to cut the excess fat out of the lines. words like "such, just, all, of, ly's and ing's" these things will slow a poem into confusion. You really could cut all the "just's" out of the poem. Just so you know just what to do, just in time. If you get my meaning. The opening line is too telling. It needs to be cut. and make the words the subject in the next line. Don't give the reader any more that what they need to get to the watering hole. When they get there let them drink on their own. Don't define or tell or describe the meaning of the poem to them. Let them have their own epiphany. It's vital. It will make the reader part of the poem and they will walk away with it in their pocket. If interested in writing better check out my class on Yuku. 
                                    http://schoolofpoetry.yuku.com/forums/66/Public-Forum
                                    a poet friend
                                    RH peat