Alone until now.

Alone until now.

353 Reads 10 Votes 4 Part Story
heyalen74324 By heyalen74324 Updated Mar 07, 2011

This is about a girl who has never really had friends she has always been made fun of and no one has ever liked her not even her parents. she was always alone until she meets riley and she realizes they both are not "normal" but the question she is dying to find out is what are we?

thelionftw thelionftw Mar 11, 2011
It's an okay start. There's a lot of run-on sentences, and you need to make a new paragraph each time you introduce a new speaker. Otherwise, it gets confusing. Not only that, but there were a few grammar errors.
                              Hope I helped!
Germancandylover1 Germancandylover1 Mar 05, 2011
I like it but could you be more detailed but other than that I will tune in every upload....lol I sounded like a news caster .... But anyway I love the story though :)