He will be ours

He will be ours

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Kitten By cabith1998 Updated Oct 05

Sammie is a short boy or man in his senior year. Standing at only 5'4 he's pretty short and hates being reminded of the fact. When his family move to Pennsylvania in the beginning of the year he thinks nothing of it since he usually sticks to himself he only had two friends however when they moved they didn't realize they moved right into the center of a werewolf community. Xavier and his twin Michelangelo are searching for there mate and already now they will have the same one but what they didn't count on was him being a resistant little spitfire. So do you think they can win him over???

  • boyxboy
I think this has potential,  but it really needs some punctuation. You didn't mark the ending of most sentences, and the lack of quotation marks is confusing. Also, I don't really know who was speaking most of the time. That said, I think the story is good so far.
I'm not trying to disrespect the author but you should check grammar before adding nick name s
Uta-Girl Uta-Girl Oct 15
This is so confusing, and it needs punctuation bad. I can't understand anything!
I knew you were trouble when I walked in. Taylor Swift anybody?
This is so confusing to read! And I am trying my best! Puntuation marks, space between those speaking, you cant jumble everything together!!
pochipanda pochipanda Jun 06, 2016
Can you edit this somehow, i loved the idea of this when i heard about it, but it's kind of hard to read... ☺