swaying drizzle

swaying drizzle

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rain122 By rain122 Updated Mar 25, 2011

the swaying drizzle,
rained...
when it rain upon the land,
broken by the heat,
of the deadly sun...

some of my poems!

rain122 rain122 Mar 29, 2011
@BlueSkiesGrayClouds thanks so much for reading and appreciating my work:). will look forward for your comments.
BlueSkiesGrayClouds BlueSkiesGrayClouds Mar 28, 2011
I like the repition in this piece, it makes the the overall poem so much more powerful and the second stanza is my favorite! I love the lines "sinking still floating, surrounded by life, amidst the edged thundering clouds..." =O amazing! =)