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The Brandywine Prophet

The Brandywine Prophet

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Jake Vander Ark By JakeVanderArk Completed

Suburban life has turned William Carmel from a drug-fueled creative prodigy to a gentle husband and father. When the voice of God commands him to construct a million-dollar amphitheater on the hill behind his home, the budding prophet obeys and unleashes his dormant madness and savage narcissism on his family and town. From the tragic prologue to the breathtaking climax, the themes of family, faith, and obsession provide an epic backdrop for this fast-paced character study.

Fakedeadgirlfriend Fakedeadgirlfriend Sep 13, 2013
Really well written that is both sad and hooks the reader in.  Well done.  Voted for it.
aclockworkangel aclockworkangel May 02, 2013
                              Should've seen my first novel. Was a terminator clone! Written when I was fifteen. =)
                              hahaha! You're good, and ill definitely read on probably. :P I like your style, it's easy to understand, and it flows nicely. You clearly put a lot of effort into this.
JakeVanderArk JakeVanderArk May 02, 2013
@aclockworkangel If you do end up reading more, I'd love to hear your thoughts! And I don't think you're critique was flawed at all. We have a few small differences of opinion, but for the most part, I think you're right on! This was my second novel... hopefully I got better with the next two.
traviesa11 traviesa11 Apr 15, 2013
I've got question after question... First and foremost, did she know? So tragic.
Coyote13 Coyote13 Sep 23, 2012
@JakeVanderArk It's fine that you've been missing my IM's. I know what you mean; I'm busy a lot too with school, homework, karate, and Drivers' Ed.
                              I'll definitely tell you my opinion at the end!
JakeVanderArk JakeVanderArk Sep 23, 2012
@Coyote13 Hey Coyote! Sorry I keep missing your IMs... it's been a busy few days!
                              I'm glad you like it so far : ) This is my favorite of my books... but it's definitely not for everyone. If you do happen to finish it, I'd love to know what you think! : )