Tanaka's life sucks. He has a hard time keeping his mouth shut. Every time he meets someone, he says something rude. He also thinks he doesn't need anyone, that is until he meets Hikaru.
You should create more complex sentences rather than shorter, simpler ones. It would make the story better. I like the story so far even though its the first chapter but just some constructive criticism.
Haha *scratches back of neck* sounds like me, but I almost get into fights with people.... A lot
* cough * it's 11:33 and I'm up * cough * Fite me * cough *
Am I the only one who imagines one of the twins from Ouran Host Club?
am i the only one who thought this was going to be a OHSHC thing
Its Tanaka from Black Butler don't let author-chan lie to you!