The Target of the Night

The Target of the Night

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perfectlybroken By perfectlybroken Updated Mar 09, 2011

While sitting next to his girlfriend, Brianna, in the hospital, Shane is writing and re-telling every emotion, feeling and experience he had with Brianna. He explains how different they were from each other, and how much they both have changed mentally and emotionally. Before Brianna, Shane just wanted to get laid, but he soon realized that Brianna was more then just the target of the night, and he soon realizes that, he is who is now, because of Brianna.

chaterboxxx chaterboxxx Feb 26, 2011
Wow...very very nicely done. Details are superb with the exception of repeating yourself inthe first few paragraphs but not enough to distract. The emotion is nicely done and I like the ending how it all tied together. 
                              
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