Felicity

11 Part Story 766 Reads 57 Votes
Veritable By Veritable Updated 3 years ago
The path of love is never easy, especially when it's been forced on you by a fairy with a gun. Sabrina Stone Steeples, a spiteful stain upon society must keep romantic mad girl, Elizabeth Maria Tethers happy to avoid execution but that's the least of his problems. With murders, paranormal outbreaks, young crime lords, plotting agents, apocalyptic clubs and super science, can Sabrina change himself for the better as the world around him changes its self for the wilder. An explosive romantic and adventurous mystery science fiction and urban fantasy series of epic proportions with aspects of action and humor, written with the pace and atmosphere of a light novel or manga.
'Sabrina's train of thought arrived at the station of "what?" and arrived without delay *at the station*.
                                    I think you should delete the 'at the station' part.
                                    When there are no periods in the dialogue , for example. "Blah blah blah" she said.
                                    you have to put a comma after that. "Blah blah blah", she said. I saw a lot of these mistakes
                                    I wish you would of made the happiness fairy a bit more bubbly :D lol Like the type who's all happy and high strung but isn't afraid to kill or doesn't hesitate. Kinda reminds me of Harley Quinn when I think about it like that.
                                    And I like where your going with the plot already, I'm suprised that this might actually turn out to be a good one :)
                                    Just get more people to read it
                                    I also like how you linked the characters in :DDD Usually I hate it when wattypaddy people try to do POV but this actually works.
                                    OMG I LOVE DETECTIVE KLUE ^_^ He's so arrogant its funny
                                    Is Whats-her-face really a fairie?? You haven't said her name enough time in this story for me to remember :/
'Sabrina's train of thought arrived at the station of "what?" and arrived without delay *at the station*.
                                    I think you should delete the 'at the station' part.
                                    When there are no periods in the dialogue , for example. "Blah blah blah" she said.
                                    you have to put a comma after that. "Blah blah blah", she said. I saw a lot of these mistakes
                                    I wish you would of made the happiness fairy a bit more bubbly :D lol Like the type who's all happy and high strung but isn't afraid to kill or doesn't hesitate. Kinda reminds me of Harley Quinn when I think about it like that.
                                    And I like where your going with the plot already, I'm suprised that this might actually turn out to be a good one :)
                                    Just get more people to read it
                                    I also like how you linked the characters in :DDD Usually I hate it when wattypaddy people try to do POV but this actually works.
                                    OMG I LOVE DETECTIVE KLUE ^_^ He's so arrogant its funny
                                    Is Whats-her-face really a fairie?? You haven't said her name enough time in this story for me to remember :/
'Sabrina's train of thought arrived at the station of "what?" and arrived without delay *at the station*.
                                    I think you should delete the 'at the station' part.
                                    When there are no periods in the dialogue , for example. "Blah blah blah" she said.
                                    you have to put a comma after that. "Blah blah blah", she said. I saw a lot of these mistakes
                                    I wish you would of made the happiness fairy a bit more bubbly :D lol Like the type who's all happy and high strung but isn't afraid to kill or doesn't hesitate. Kinda reminds me of Harley Quinn when I think about it like that.
                                    And I like where your going with the plot already, I'm suprised that this might actually turn out to be a good one :)
                                    Just get more people to read it
                                    I also like how you linked the characters in :DDD Usually I hate it when wattypaddy people try to do POV but this actually works.
                                    OMG I LOVE DETECTIVE KLUE ^_^ He's so arrogant its funny
                                    Is Whats-her-face really a fairie?? You haven't said her name enough time in this story for me to remember :/
'Sabrina's train of thought arrived at the station of "what?" and arrived without delay *at the station*.
                                    I think you should delete the 'at the station' part.
                                    When there are no periods in the dialogue , for example. "Blah blah blah" she said.
                                    you have to put a comma after that. "Blah blah blah", she said. I saw a lot of these mistakes
                                    I wish you would of made the happiness fairy a bit more bubbly :D lol Like the type who's all happy and high strung but isn't afraid to kill or doesn't hesitate. Kinda reminds me of Harley Quinn when I think about it like that.
                                    And I like where your going with the plot already, I'm suprised that this might actually turn out to be a good one :)
                                    Just get more people to read it
                                    I also like how you linked the characters in :DDD Usually I hate it when wattypaddy people try to do POV but this actually works.
                                    OMG I LOVE DETECTIVE KLUE ^_^ He's so arrogant its funny
                                    Is Whats-her-face really a fairie?? You haven't said her name enough time in this story for me to remember :/
'Sabrina's train of thought arrived at the station of "what?" and arrived without delay *at the station*.
                                    I think you should delete the 'at the station' part.
                                    When there are no periods in the dialogue , for example. "Blah blah blah" she said.
                                    you have to put a comma after that. "Blah blah blah", she said. I saw a lot of these mistakes
                                    I wish you would of made the happiness fairy a bit more bubbly :D lol Like the type who's all happy and high strung but isn't afraid to kill or doesn't hesitate. Kinda reminds me of Harley Quinn when I think about it like that.
                                    And I like where your going with the plot already, I'm suprised that this might actually turn out to be a good one :)
                                    Just get more people to read it
                                    I also like how you linked the characters in :DDD Usually I hate it when wattypaddy people try to do POV but this actually works.
                                    OMG I LOVE DETECTIVE KLUE ^_^ He's so arrogant its funny
                                    Is Whats-her-face really a fairie?? You haven't said her name enough time in this story for me to remember :/