Bloodshot

Bloodshot

138 Reads 28 Votes 1 Part Story
sonia By soniia Completed

A short Story with two perspectives. One of whom is a Prisoner and the other of a Soldier both who experience two different lives at Guantanamo Bay.

VishwasRao99 VishwasRao99 Aug 19, 2012
very nice book... it clearly describes the the point of view of a prisoner (which i rather felt bad for) and the soldier ( who at first wanted to go and shoot but later realises he has no other option) im gonna vote, recommend. This is clearly one of the best writing i have read
MiahRumel MiahRumel Aug 15, 2012
You demonstrate great literary skills and an enthusiastic approach to a vivid image of the subject-love this story :)
omg_poptarts omg_poptarts Aug 13, 2012
only thing i suggest is dividing up into paragraphs :) but this was really good no joke haha. i think you have potential xD ;)
book_freak97 book_freak97 Aug 13, 2012
Incredibly descriptive and very well written. No grammatical errors I could see but maybe try spacing a bit more, other than that it's a great story.
soniia soniia Aug 13, 2012
@SGerrard2012 @I_Smell_Music  thank you both and @I_Smell_Music  much appreciated for your honest comment ... i'll try changing it!
I_Smell_Music I_Smell_Music Aug 13, 2012
Wow this is a really good story! I think it would make it easier to read though if you added paragraphs. It was well written from showing their views.