Believe Me When I Tell You

Believe Me When I Tell You

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Vampdiaries101 By Vampdiaries101 Updated Jun 19, 2012

"Who could have thought that one broken heart could lead to so much madness?" Eva Knightly never meant to hurt anyone. It was a simple mission, save Daniel Gravence's soul from damnation. However, things did not go as planned. And when her mission was over he died and Eva was held responsible. Kicked out from heaven for four years before she is given a chance to return home. The mission is simple, save Nick Parker's soul from damnation. Can Eva complete this mission without the past repeating itself? For her sake, she better pray.

  • angel
  • angle
  • archie
  • chance
  • cookies
  • eva
  • feline
  • mission
  • misunderstanding
  • murderer
  • nick
  • parker
  • second
allures allures Oct 03, 2013
It seems so mysterious and captivating. No mistakes I can spot so far, fantastic job! :)
                              
                              I love the way you did the cliffhanger at the end. Very interesting and leaves the reader wanting more. 
                              
                              Fantastic job and keep writing! :)
KaylaKeifer KaylaKeifer Jun 29, 2012
I think that this is a good way to begin a story. I think you did a great job with your structure, for everything flowed very nicely and I didn't get confused once. I really like your writting style, too!
Joon_Nathea Joon_Nathea Jun 29, 2012
I really enjoyed this chapter. In it's length it's not too long (as a prologue) yet it intreagues the reader enough :) Though it's not easy to single out this chapter to form on opinion :)
kywildcat28 kywildcat28 Jun 19, 2012
This sounds really good. It's original and I've never read anything like it. Nice job. :)
- - Jun 07, 2012
I haven't read anything quite like this before, and I've got to say that I quite like it xx
Vampdiaries101 Vampdiaries101 Jun 07, 2012
@SamPilot I know! I asked this forum on 'Book Covers' for one and they sent me some picks, I chose this one and they made it. TheRedRose777 did it for me. She's amazing at it.