Impossible Love

Impossible Love

11.7K Reads 68 Votes 2 Part Story
Maarine By Maarine Updated Oct 24, 2012

Jessica Brooke was popular, not only in her class but throughout the school. Most of the students knew her as the captain of cheerleading squad. She has pretty much everything that most teenagers would kill for. Her life changed brutally after a horrible car crash. She lost her family. So with nowhere to go, she moved to her aunt's house and discovered that she has something special, something that no one else has. She has been branded a freak at her new high school - but everything changes when a new student arrives - Damon Carter

ItsAMetaphorReally ItsAMetaphorReally Jun 16, 2012
i really like it keep it up cuz its really good xx - Amanda @Maarine
- - Jun 16, 2012
I enjoyed it! Great start.
                              
                              Love how you ended the chapter with a cliffhanger, everyone say's they hate cliffhanger but really a lot of readers enjoy them.
Maarine Maarine Jun 12, 2012
@Juiced I'll try to show more than telling, and add more description as soon as i edit this chapter :P
                              
                              @Shanablay Thank you, I think the second chapter is better :)
                              
                              @Niall_Riall You're right! Thank you :3
Niall_Riall Niall_Riall Jun 12, 2012
Good start and your a great writer! I argee, that you should have a better description, but the story itself is written very well. I really enjoyed it (: xx
Shanablay Shanablay Jun 12, 2012
This is a good start to a story and I quite enjoyed it. I agree with the previous critiques, you could add a little more description. 
                              I enjoy cliff hangers at the end of chapters and I feel you did that very well.
                              Anyway, good story and keep up the good work :)
NinaBella NinaBella Jun 11, 2012
a bit short, but very good and detailed. Your writing is amazing. (: